This is for the book I am trying to right and this is what I have so far. Please feel free to make constructive criticism, but no rude/silly/inappropriate answers and please tell me what you think so far.
Twice Told Tales, was the name of the library, that Arabella walked passed everyday on her way to school.It was a creepy old library but she loved it none the less. On Friday she was in the library, in a section called Earth.It was all these books from another planet and this was her favourite section to read from. Arabella loved reading books from Earth because they were much more exciting then the ones written of Sotur. She was reading about an artist called Leonardo Da Vinci and how he painted this very popular painting called the Mona Lisa. Arabella loved the painting as soon as she set her eyes on it. She was so immersed in her book that she didn't notice how silent the library was until she had finished reading the book. She got out of her chair and noticed a cool breeze coming through the window that started making her long blond hair float around her like it had a mind of its own. Arabella walking over to the window to shut it but noticed a black hole outside the window. Straight away she knew what it was; a portal to the void. She had read about the void in Soturian books aswell as Earthen books. The only thing was on Earth they called them Black Holes and the Humans, Arabella remembered this is what they were called, had no idea what a black hole was or where it lead. But, people from Sotur did, they had rocketships so much more advanced than Earth's that they could fly into a black hole and make it out with only a little bit of sickness. Arabella ran outside and was horrified at what she saw; trees pushed over, dogs, cat, horses, cows and every animal inbetween gone. There was one thing that Arabella loved about Earth and Sotur; the animals and everything in the environment were called the same thing; nearly everything was called the same thing and she didn't get mixed up with the Earthen names and the Soturian names. There were no people around either; everyone is gone from this world except for me, she sobbed. Just then she heard a car engine and her hopes flew right up and she rushed to the window to see her best friend Kiyoka pull up at the end of her drive way two seconds later.
Kiyoka threw herself at Arabella and they both started crying. 'I thought I was the only one left, sobbed Kiyoka.
Just as Arabella was about to say the same thing, she saw the picture she was looking at earlier, the Mona Lisa and the man who painted it, standing at the open window looking out at the void. 'Kiyoka, you know how I like reading Earthen stories. Well, today, I was reading one about a man named Leonardo Da Vinci and a picture he painted called the Mona Lisa. I loved the painting so much because it was so pretty. Now, I get to meet the man who painted.'
Kiyoka just stared at Arabella with confused eyes behind her thick lenses. 'What do you mean Arabella?'
'Well, you see that man over there? That's Leonardo Da Vinci. He's dead. He died on Earth in 1519, that's over 500 years ago, for the year is 2019.'
Just as she said that, Leonardo Da Vinci turned around and said 'How do you know who I am? I have never seen you before in my life.'
'H… H… How did you…' before Kiyoka could finish the sentence both her and Arabella were thinking, she saw the book that Arabella was reading before, open on a page that read "The Timeline of the Mona Lisa". There on each side of the page, was a photo missing. The captions read "Leonardo Da Vinci (and) The Mona Lisa".
'Arabella…' Kiyoka began to whisper, 'he and the painting, they came out of the book you were reading.'
THIS IS A COPY WRITE PRODUCTION
Added (1). @ WeepingAngles. I am unsure as to what audience, probz teenage (YAF). This is just a draft and I thankyou for your constructive criticism
>>> Is this good so far.?